NEW POEM-- please read and C/C?

It's very visual and warm, and while you have room for improvement, I enjoyed it and those words I used to describe it, I consider to be high praise, as I usually don't get any sort of reaction to amateur poetry. You are weaving a spell with your words. Keep trying, and I recommend letting people edit your work, too! Maybe even a creative writing teacher you trust. They'll always make changes that make you glare fiercely, but the advice is quite often sound, and it will help you grow as an artist.